Matt Bellamy

Hi again! I feel the same way about this poem as I did about the one I just reviewed of yours - it's good, but it's very short. I do ...

Hi! I think this is very sweet. It rhymes very well and flows nicely, and it's quite cute. I think the exclamation point at the end also adds to this ...

:lol: I like haiku, and I particularly like this one. It made me laugh. I suppose read outloud it doesn't really sound like a haiku - it's not very poetic, ...

Hey! I like the second poem and since haiku are a little difficult to critique, I can't really find anything wrong with it. It sounds good. However the first haiku ...

Hello! There is a lot of repetition in here, and when something is repeated once or twice, it works quite well, but if there's too much, it becomes less effective. ...

Hello! I'm not sure what to say to this, I found it rather strange. The end of the first line seemed to be forced to make it rhyme with the ...

I agree with MayApple that the lines are a little difficult to read when they're that long, so maybe try splitting them as she suggested. I also thought the first ...

Hi! This is short and sweet, but I think it could flow a lot better. The third line sounds a little too long and interrupts the flow a bit, so ...

Hello! I really like this. It's well written, has good rhyming and it flows well. However, a couple of lines, such as "Trapped forever in love's labyrinth abyss" were a ...

Hey! This poem has potential. There are a few niggly little things, though - in the fourth line you say "I am scared," and this is very blunt. I think ...

Hello! I usually don't like poems about writing poetry, but this was pretty good. It's light-hearted, just as a poem with this theme should be, and the rhyming scheme adds ...

Hi! There are a lot of ideas crammed into this poem, loads of imagery, and I like it. I like the idea of nights being old. It sounded to me ...

Hi! I quite like the imagery in this - the snow, the rain, etc, though it is a little cliché, waiting in the rain for someone. I like the rhyming ...

I like the theme to this poem, and how you kept it throughout. However, this is a bit confusing, the way it's written: "Bittersweet wind, crisp / stinging my face". ...

The rhyming is indeed forced. You could try just thinking about what you want to say and what you want your reader to get from the poem - that should ...